“In the name of God” is a theme associated with some of humanities greatest atrocities. Real life is the real horror story. I’m just sprinkling my take.
This is definitely one of those ones I feel could do with more time to breathe. Having it as a flash piece is a disservice to the dope ass idea. Having so much to expound in a short period of time.
I did very much like the theme and vibe you have going here. Just wish we weren't being told of the horrors, rather than shown, if that makes sense.
all in all a great little piece. Just my own subjective malarkey! hype to check out more of your stuff.
Thank you for the subscription and taking the time to read this one! Thank you for the feedback and I one million percent agree. There is definitely a full length story here and I hope to explore it again after I get through these next couple of projects. The prompt was “Climate fiction with a 250 word limit.” I love doing these to get the juices in the brain flowing. If this was a full length project I think I would have taken the time to “observe” the world rather than tell. I think I would also have delved deeper into the protagonist inner struggle to prolong humanity despite the cost. Maybe he has a child and the only way to keep her from the chancellor is to maintain the blood fields. So much potential!
If you’re interested I just released MY BROTHER BARRY, which is a psychological horror story (2,500 words). I really poured my heart into that one and I feel like it represents my style. I’ll link it below. Happy reading!
Love the world you’ve created in such a short amount of time. Religious zealots demanding the unnecessary sacrifice makes for a compelling narrative. Love this entire idea. Well written
Thank you! I try and release fiction biweekly, if you would like to give my page a chance. I run an open forum where I welcome critiques, prompts and insight from everyone who takes the time to read my stories. I linked my latest short story that released along side The Blood Fields. They are independent of one another but it’s just as bleak. Happy reading!
How many times God’s will is used a shoggy mask for human shirtsightedness. Wisdom is the art of exercising the acrobat's humility.
“In the name of God” is a theme associated with some of humanities greatest atrocities. Real life is the real horror story. I’m just sprinkling my take.
This is definitely one of those ones I feel could do with more time to breathe. Having it as a flash piece is a disservice to the dope ass idea. Having so much to expound in a short period of time.
I did very much like the theme and vibe you have going here. Just wish we weren't being told of the horrors, rather than shown, if that makes sense.
all in all a great little piece. Just my own subjective malarkey! hype to check out more of your stuff.
Thank you for the subscription and taking the time to read this one! Thank you for the feedback and I one million percent agree. There is definitely a full length story here and I hope to explore it again after I get through these next couple of projects. The prompt was “Climate fiction with a 250 word limit.” I love doing these to get the juices in the brain flowing. If this was a full length project I think I would have taken the time to “observe” the world rather than tell. I think I would also have delved deeper into the protagonist inner struggle to prolong humanity despite the cost. Maybe he has a child and the only way to keep her from the chancellor is to maintain the blood fields. So much potential!
If you’re interested I just released MY BROTHER BARRY, which is a psychological horror story (2,500 words). I really poured my heart into that one and I feel like it represents my style. I’ll link it below. Happy reading!
https://open.substack.com/pub/dvwrites123/p/my-brother-barry?r=5awwk0&utm_medium=ios
So short yet so dark and vivid! Their as much world building not in the text as there is within it - it - it 🤯🤯🤯
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Love the world you’ve created in such a short amount of time. Religious zealots demanding the unnecessary sacrifice makes for a compelling narrative. Love this entire idea. Well written
Thank you so much!!!! Did you share your piece for Macabre Monday yet? I didn’t see it. If you did drop it in here so I have something to read!!!!
Lmao thanks for reminding me. I appreciate you 🤘🏽✊🏽
Bleak and very effective.
Thank you! I try and release fiction biweekly, if you would like to give my page a chance. I run an open forum where I welcome critiques, prompts and insight from everyone who takes the time to read my stories. I linked my latest short story that released along side The Blood Fields. They are independent of one another but it’s just as bleak. Happy reading!
https://open.substack.com/pub/dvwrites123/p/my-brother-barry?utm_source=app-post-stats-page&r=5awwk0&utm_medium=ios
I’ll have a look!
Wow, bleak but interesting.